Dear Agent,
When an unlikely crew from Earth sets out to make first contact with a mysterious alien race, no one could have predicted the supernatural war they accidentally incite between extraterrestrials and the gods who are eager to put the mortals back in their place.
Major Hugo Dunstan sees ghosts. To be specific, the ghosts of his pregnant wife and young child, recently deceased in a car crash. Able to see but unable to touch them, he is faced with two options: suicide or embarking on the dangerous mission the government has employed him on. He and his unlikely crew, including a straight-laced anthropologist and an unlikely hero of an android, set out to meet a distant alien race Earth has recently come into contact with. After being thrown off course and kidnapped by extraterrestrial slave traders, things go from bad to worse when they uncover a plot to enslave humankind. War with neighboring planets soon becomes the least of their problems when a host of gods decide the mortals’ time is up.
MASTER OF NOTHING is a science fiction/fantasy novel complete at 121,000 words. While it is my first finished novel, I have two separate novels I am currently working on in the fantasy genre. I also have published poetry in Images Magazine and in Yemassee Magazine.
Play-by-play updates on the progress of my query draft!
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Hi Becca,
ReplyDeleteThe first paragraph promises to be great but it would benefit from more specific information. Be clear about what sparks the war, and why the gods are angry at the extraterrestrials instead of the people on the space mission.
And since you end with the war, jumping to the car crash hits a wrong note. The story question raised in the first paragraph implies that the Major has to stop the war, which leads to frustration when we get sidetracked. I would suggest leading with the problem and building up to the story question so this intriguing premise can really shine!
Good luck with this!